“The Day Of Reckoning”
I’ve just put my latest short story on my web site. It’s entitled “The Day Of Reckoning” and you can read it here.
Please let me know what you think.
I’ve been writing short stories for a year now and this is my 23rd. You can check out the others here.
July 30th, 2010 at 10:52 pm
Wow, great imaginative story Rog, well done our kid!
July 30th, 2010 at 10:53 pm
Delightful!
Quixotic, engaging, provacative, cogent, and topped off with a surprisng and satisfying closing.
While I think Madame President could have made an even stronger case – as by citing world-wide voluntarism efforts, gains against illiteracy, gains in public health, and the such, she does a fine job in a tense setting,
Thank goodness the call came and she took it – and explained it as she did.
Now, time for all of us to “get on with it.”
July 30th, 2010 at 10:56 pm
Very remarkable. Brilliant.
August 1st, 2010 at 10:27 am
Quite good, Roger. I like the ‘Socratic dialogue’ format – a good vehicle.
Utterly unbelievable, though. The Visitor, if he/she has any sense, would have to terminate the human species a.s.a.p. because the experiment has clearly gone rogue.
More power to your pen. (More clout to your keyboard?)
August 2nd, 2010 at 12:42 pm
Different! I liked it
August 8th, 2010 at 3:56 pm
wow – what a great idea. I really enjoyed it: it showed humanity in its complexity both quickly and effectively. Not an easy thing to capture and yet you do, persusasively. And both were quite endearing characters, though I did think she let him into her office very easily!
The one question that I have is his parting comment. ‘Try harder’… does that not reinforce the whole: ‘try harder, do more… conquer, exploit, and ultimately decimate? Does it not reinforce the mind-frame that got us the less pleasant aspects?
Could there be a different, more quixotical invocation…. Try softer…. Try kinder…. Try… genuine equality… compassion… listening… I don’t know what exactly, it’s just a thought.
August 10th, 2010 at 10:02 am
Good comments on my story, Jen.
As you found, I think that an alternative word to ‘harder’ is hard (!) to find.
Also it is a rather opaque word and I rather like that ambiguity.
August 10th, 2010 at 5:27 pm
Yes… I can see the point of its opacity. It is a good word because it leaves me thinking.